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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? In many parts of the world people are suffering from a lack of a suitable place to live. This leads to the city planning department allowing construction of the green areas outside cities to house the ever growing population. While many consider this a positive step in urban development, I personally believe the urban sprawl can adversely affect our physical and mental health. This short essay elaborates on my viewpoints regarding this controversial topic along with relevant examples. The provision of suitable accommodation is one of the main problems amongst people wanting to live in large cities. Coping with such a widespread problem, residential developments are built in the countryside in many parts of the world. I personally believe this is simply a temporary remedy for such a significantly complicated problem especially in the developing countries where the facilities are mostly concentrated in metropolises. In other words, not only are these constructions ruining the green belt of our cities, they also invite more people from villages to live in newly built residential areas. The more facilities that are built in metropolises, the more people are attracted to live in them. The constructions in the countryside have destructive impacts on the natural environment. The green belt outside big cities plays a significant role in purification of polluted air coming from the metropolises. People in large cities hoping to find fresh air enjoy spending their time in the countryside out of cities to inhale the fresh clean air. Only when we preserve part of the natural environment in large cities can we expect economic growth by a healthy work force. By way of conclusion, my opinion is that the negative impacts of construction in the countryside far outweigh its drawbacks. Although (vertical and horizontal) expansion of cities to the countryside is a solution for home shortage, I hold the idea that this will face civilians with more complicated health related problems sooner or later. Word count is 322 with the changes to your essay. I suggest making all of the red changes and taking out some of the comas. I would like to see what your English teacher corrects.